Toby and Sara (all new NC-17 story)

CappuGirl · 07 Oct 08 :: 13:16

Author's note: I claim all rights to this story. This is part of a little story I'm writing. All new charecters. I didn't (atleast not knowingly) use anyone else's creations. I'd like to cast Chris Marquette as Toby and maybe Taryn Southern as Sara. At least that's what I had in mind when I was writing it...

I'm not sure if this is the right place to post this but here it goes... In this bit we get to go inside Sara's head…
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I see him there, lying on his back. All relaxed. His shirt lifts up a little when he puts his arms behind his neck. A pair of blue jeans has never looked so good on a man. He still has his eyes closed but I know he hears me. He woke up when I opened the door to the bedroom. I try to sneak up to him but manage get my toe under the rug and fall down. It doesn't make a lot of noise but I see him keeping him self from laughter. I whisper a few curses as I check out the hurt toe. That's what makes him to burst. I look up to him a bit annoyed for being a laughing stock. – That's the worst surprise attempt ever, he says laughing. – How did you get that clumsy?

I can never stay mad at him for long. Not when he looks at me like that. With his loving eyes locked in mine, a little smile on his lips. I feel my self relax and bite my lip to keep my self from smiling. I stand there, looking in his eyes; trying to keep up the act of being mad at him for ruining my surprise. I can feel my heart rate go up and butterflies gathering under my belly button. He does this in purpose. He knows that stare has this effect on me. His eyes make me melt inside. My skin is tingeling everywhere; missing his touch. I feel my panties getting a little wet. I lick my upper lip and he smiles widely. He knows he won.

I jump to the bed and climb on top of him. His eyes are still in mine. His smile tones down a little as I bend over to kiss him. – My, my… Is that a light saber in your pocket or are you excited to see me? I whisper against his mouth. As he lets out a little laughter, I feel a hot breath in my face. It sends a tremble through my body. I can't hold it any longer. I press my lips against his. Softly at first but it quickly turns into passionate devouring of each other. I move my hips against his. It feels so good I just keep on getting more and more turned on. I close my eyes and enjoy. I sit up, still moving my hips and pull over my shirt. He sighs upon seeing my new red bra. As I look at him I see his eyes getting all misty. I love seeing him so turned on.

I grave to touch him. I push my hands under his shirt caressing his skin; it's so hot it almost burns my fingers. I feel his abs as he stirs a little. I go deeper as I want to feel his chest against mine. I feel his warm hands landing on my hips. His thumbs are caressing me a little. Our lips meet again but not for long. His lips are so soft, so hot. I go for his neck and let him breath. A big vane pulses under my lips. When I go closer to his ear, I feel his breathing getting heavier. He lifts one his hands across my belly to my breast. He kisses my neck and makes me want to find his lips again. As we share a deep kiss, I pull him up against me and take off his shirt. I softly push him back to the bed wanting to kiss his chest. The hair in his chest tickles a little. As I start to move my hips more rapidly against him, he takes a fast inhale and craps my waist. A small scream escapes my lips when he lifts me up and rolls over me. As I feel him rubbing him self against me I hear my self starting to moan. I can't wait to get him inside me…

Last edited by CappuGirlFin (23 Oct 08 :: 09:18)

CappuGirl · 07 Oct 08 :: 14:38

Oops. K18 is a finnish marking for adults only. I can't seem to change the title anymore.

Come on. Let me hear how bad it is. It's the first time I write a story in english so I don't mind getting some constructive critique. I've got some more rough writing on the same story but I don't know if I dare to share it just yet. I've never before shared any of my writing. :embarrassed:

Ps. This is my 69th post here. How appropriate. Dirty number for a dirty post.
By this rate, I'll get the 1000 posts by the end of the month. Freaking my self out. Boring all the rest with my rambling... :embarrassed:

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BiggestChrisMarquetteFan · 08 Oct 08 :: 04:54

I really like it. I love your style of writing. You should write more!

CappuGirl · 08 Oct 08 :: 06:23

BiggestChrisMarquetteFan wrote:

I really like it. I love your style of writing. You should write more!

Njaah, you just like it because it's basicly a soft porn story about Chris! :rofl:
Actually a bit of my JTT got mixed up into this Toby character. Some parts of that little story actually happen at our house... a lot! :embarrassed: I'll write more soon. Now I'm kinda just thinking about the story and how to evolve it...

TheCentralScrutinizer · 09 Oct 08 :: 05:53

I finally got to read it tonight, Maria. It's very good. You sure know how to leave your audience hanging! Heh. Trust me, nobody is bored. Please continue the story! If you want me to, I could correct a few wording errors here and there.

(Holy crap, this is my 10,000 post!)

CappuGirl · 09 Oct 08 :: 07:36

Sisterdebmac wrote:

If you want me to, I could correct a few wording errors here and there.

That would be great.

CappuGirl · 23 Oct 08 :: 10:47

Hey.. i felt like writing some more of this... It's getting pretty smutty...

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I lift my hips against him a little in his rhythm. He sighs and stops to touch my face and kiss me on the lips. Then he rolls next to me. I can still feel his skin against mine when his belly touches my side. He runs his hand from my face across my chest, making little circles on my belly. It makes my abs tremble, gives me more butterflies. I close my eyes and let him work his magic on me. His every touch makes me tremble and sigh in pleasure. I feel his hand go lower. He plays with a little with the button on my pants. It makes me laugh a little. Nervous laugh. I know what he's up to.

Finally he opens the button and then slowly my zipper. Too slowly. I feel my self getting really wet from anticipation. He apparently wants to drive me crazy. He plays with the string on my underwear now; running his finger under it, left and right. He's got no rush. Still I hear his breath has gone really heavy. He's watching me react. He decides to let me off my agony and slowly slides his hand in my pants. He draws little circles in my pubes now. He accidently slips down a little and hits my clit sending a small wave of pleasure over me. – Oops, he says and takes his finger off there making me sigh dissatisfied. He laughs a little. I lift hips against his hand now, begging for more. He smiles widely, gives me want I want. His long, sensitive fingers work their magic on me now. At first it's just one finger, the index that strokes the outer parts of my pubic. Then another finger accompanies it and bit by bit they head for more moisture parts of me.

It feels so good, gives me such pleasure. And still I want more. I lift the hips against his hand again, asking for more. I hear him gasp for air. Affection fills my chest. He takes my pleasure over his own. I take my hand to my side, fondle him through his pants. He's so hard it turns me on even more. I slide my hand inside his pants, caress his cock slowly. It aspires against my hand. I hear him breathing shallow now and feel him put two of his fingers inside of me. It makes me gasping for air, feels so good I don't know if I can stand it. Still I don't want him to stop. Still I want more. My own hand moves faster now, making him breath faster too. Two of his fingers inside of me, thumb moving to my clit. He really does want to make me crazy.

He plays me like an instrument. I hear sounds come out of my mouth. I never knew I could make such sounds. My back arches, my body feels like it's on fire. I lift my hips against his hand, in his rhythm. His dick feels so hard, yet the skin on it is so silky soft. It tremors in my hand. Finally it starts to pulse and I feel the warm liquid fall on my hand. He tries to hold in his moan, still moving his hand inside of me. Not long after I feel my self come. I feel my self tremor. He puts his face on my neck, kissing me there. His hand is still inside me, not moving anymore. He lets me come down a little. Until we continue…

Last edited by CappuGirlFin (23 Oct 08 :: 11:00)

CappuGirl · 23 Oct 08 :: 19:14

Oops.. Did I go too far? :embarrassed:

BiggestChrisMarquetteFan · 24 Oct 08 :: 04:41

Awesome job, Maria! Smutty but sweet.

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